university education

1、FsuccessfuldevelopmentofacountryshouldagovernmentfocusitsbudgetmeonveryyoungchildreneducationratherthanonuniversitiesHerecomesatopicof(我不是很推崇這個(gè)開頭，你可以換一個(gè)，模板很多嗎，盡量新穎點(diǎn)，這個(gè)太生硬了)publicinterest:whethergovernmentshouldinvestmone

2、ymeonyoungchildreneducationratherthanonuniversitiesFranklythesideofmycoinwillactuallyfacestowardanoppositeside.(句子不錯(cuò)）Thatistosayitissuchachoicethatwillbetterraisespiritmindprovidetheopptunityofsuccessincareer.（這句是中式思維而且沒(méi)

3、交代誰(shuí)的careeritis是強(qiáng)調(diào)句這個(gè)choice應(yīng)該后面加個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句解釋下）Whatsmetherewillbehigherfundingrequisiteinuniversitiesthaninkindergartenprimaryschools.Thefollowinganalysisesexampleswillconsolidatemypointofview.Beyondnodoubtcomesmyfirstperspecti

4、vehighlightingthedramaticdevelopmentinthespiritmindinuniversityeducationwhichisfarbeyondstudentsimagination.Itiswidelyacknowledgedthatthebestperiodinlifefpeople(inone’slife)togainknowledgeisat(主語(yǔ)是period，這個(gè)at就不能有了)theirtw

5、entieswhichisjustinuniversity.Hadyouneverreceivededucationofhighqualityinuniversityyouwouldhavenotachievedadramaticboostinthoughtakeywdtoeveryindividualmemberinthismoderntime.Amanwithoutawisemindmanyofusbelievewillbecome

6、theunftunatevictimofadversecircumstancedeprivedofthegreatestopptunitiesofthetwentyfirstcentury.Therefetheattendanceofuniversityeducationdoesstrengthenoursoulsclearourvisionsinspireourambitionsmotivateourthoughts.Takethes

7、tudyofadvancedmathsasanexamplewhichisthecoursethatmostoftheuniversitystudentswilltake.Thelogicalthinkinginsideitcanactuallyencouragetheenthusiasmpassionofthestudentswhointhissituationmaydeveloptheiruniquecreativesolution

8、stotheiracademicproblems.Fromthiscaseitistheuniversityeducationthatdeveloponesgrowthinthewisdom.Notonlydoesthefirstpointjustifymysidebutthesecondalsoprovidesthefullsupptstatesthatuniversityeducationwilloffertheopptunityo

9、fsuccessincareers.Tobefrankmostofthecoursessetinuniversitiesareofmajwhicharespeciallydesignedffuturejob換成career.Thebetteryoudoinmajcoursethehigherpossibilitiesthatyouwillhavetofindagoodjobrelatedtoyourmaj.Herecomesanexam

10、plethatcanexactlyillustratemypoint.MybrotherstudiedaccountinginuniversityhegotanAfalmost80percentofhiscourses.Heevenwonthescholarshipeveryyear.Aftergraduationhesuccessfullybecameanaccountantinabigcompany.Mybrotheroftensa

11、ysthatitisthegoodperfmanceinmajcoursesduringuniversitythatgivehimthejob.這個(gè)表達(dá)不好accesstosuccessFromthepersonalexperienceofmybrotherIcanconcludethattheuniversityeducationdoesmakegreatcontributionstothesuccessoffuturecareer.

12、Inspiteoftheaboveconvincingproofherecomesmythirdviewwhichconcentratesonthefundingneedinuniversity.Admittedlythehighqualityuniversityeducationdependsonthesuperiprofesssadvancedequipmentstogetherwiththebroadclassroomslabat

13、ies.Weretherenotenoughfundingsupptedwherewouldtheseconditionscomefrom中式思維再斟酌下Fromthispointhardlycouldanyoneelsedenymyperspective.BasedontheabovediscussionIfeelsafetoconcludethatitisnecessaryfgovernmenttobudgetmeonunivers

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