cet寫作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評全集

1、CET寫作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評全集寫作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評全集作文題目：“WomenintheModernWld”提綱：1.Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.____________2.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.______________

2、_____3.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.___________________________例1（2分段）Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.Longagewomenonlydidsomethinginthekitchenathome.Nowma

3、nyofthemhaveseriousjobstoservefpeople.Whatmencandosocanwomen.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.Todayinthefamilythewifeoftenlotsherhusbtodosomethingathomebatagoonlywomendidsome

4、thing.Menarefonedofdoingsomethingathome.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.Sometimesthematterthehusbhittinghaswelfoftenhappened.Inthefactythewonmentoasmuchasthemenbuttheyarepaidlessth

5、anthemen.Somepeoplehavenotcompletelyrealizedtheliberationofwomen.東方教育點(diǎn)評：條理不清，思路紊亂，大部分句子均有錯誤，有的甚至影響理解。具體問題剖析：(1)缺乏邏輯，東一句西一句，沒有圍繞中心論述，如第一段就沒有展開論述婦女社會角色的轉(zhuǎn)變，說得太籠統(tǒng)而缺乏說服力。（2）用漢語思維，句子有明顯的漢語痕跡，如“Whatmencandosocanwomen.”，應(yīng)改為“Wome

6、ncandowhatmencando”。（3）銜接不自然，沒有用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞，如“Sometimesthematterthehusbhittinghaswelfoftenhappened”，應(yīng)改為“Thecasethathusbhitshiswifeoftenhappens.”Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.ManyWomentodayareplaying

7、animptantpartatwksthatwasthoughtonlycouldbedonebythemenbefe.Fanexample.Somewomenarenotsecrtaryintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagerofacompany.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell

8、.Inthewldtodaymemewomenhavetheirownjob.Theygettheirownsalarybecomemeindependentfromtheirhusb.Withtheeconomicsituationimprovedtheirfamilypositionisimproving.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyr

9、ealized.Manyhusbsonlywanthiswifetostayathomedohousewksdosomeshopping.Theyonlywanttheirwifetobeahousewifebutnotamanagerofacompany.東方教育點(diǎn)評：基本切題。有些地方表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文字勉強(qiáng)連貫；語言錯誤相當(dāng)多，其中有一些是嚴(yán)重錯誤。具體問題剖析：（1）論證不夠深入，缺少事例，缺少說服力。（2）文字缺連貫、且顯累

10、贅，如第二段可以把各句再改得簡練一點(diǎn)并且有適當(dāng)?shù)霓D(zhuǎn)承詞。（3）語言錯誤相當(dāng)多，如“Fanexample”，“Somewomenarenotsecrtaryintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagerofacompany.”應(yīng)改為“Somewomenareonlongersecretariesintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagersofthecompanies.”（單復(fù)數(shù)）例4（1

11、1分段）Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.Memewomengotowktoearnmoneyinsteadofkeepingthehouselookingafterthechildren.Womenhaveenteredmanyfieldsofsocietyincludingscientificfield.Asweknowmanywomensptsteam

12、shavewonthewld’schampionssuchasChinesewomen’sVolleyballTeam.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.Husbsarenotthemastersofwivesinmanyplaces.Husbswivesareequalnow.Theyjointogether

13、toovercomedifficultiessharehappiness.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.Alsoinsomeplaces.Womenareconsideredbeing“thing”belongtomen.Theyhavelittlechancetofindjobs.Theydon’tgetequalpayf