cet寫(xiě)作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評(píng)全集

1、CET寫(xiě)作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評(píng)全集寫(xiě)作典型例文精彩點(diǎn)評(píng)全集作文題目：“WomenintheModernWld”提綱：1.Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.____________2.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.______________

2、_____3.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.___________________________例1（2分段）Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.Longagewomenonlydidsomethinginthekitchenathome.Nowma

3、nyofthemhaveseriousjobstoservefpeople.Whatmencandosocanwomen.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.Todayinthefamilythewifeoftenlotsherhusbtodosomethingathomebatagoonlywomendidsome

4、thing.Menarefonedofdoingsomethingathome.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.Sometimesthematterthehusbhittinghaswelfoftenhappened.Inthefactythewonmentoasmuchasthemenbuttheyarepaidlessth

5、anthemen.Somepeoplehavenotcompletelyrealizedtheliberationofwomen.東方教育點(diǎn)評(píng)：條理不清，思路紊亂，大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，有的甚至影響理解。具體問(wèn)題剖析：(1)缺乏邏輯，東一句西一句，沒(méi)有圍繞中心論述，如第一段就沒(méi)有展開(kāi)論述婦女社會(huì)角色的轉(zhuǎn)變，說(shuō)得太籠統(tǒng)而缺乏說(shuō)服力。（2）用漢語(yǔ)思維，句子有明顯的漢語(yǔ)痕跡，如“Whatmencandosocanwomen.”，應(yīng)改為“Wome

6、ncandowhatmencando”。（3）銜接不自然，沒(méi)有用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞，如“Sometimesthematterthehusbhittinghaswelfoftenhappened”，應(yīng)改為“Thecasethathusbhitshiswifeoftenhappens.”Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.ManyWomentodayareplaying

7、animptantpartatwksthatwasthoughtonlycouldbedonebythemenbefe.Fanexample.Somewomenarenotsecrtaryintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagerofacompany.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell

8、.Inthewldtodaymemewomenhavetheirownjob.Theygettheirownsalarybecomemeindependentfromtheirhusb.Withtheeconomicsituationimprovedtheirfamilypositionisimproving.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyr

9、ealized.Manyhusbsonlywanthiswifetostayathomedohousewksdosomeshopping.Theyonlywanttheirwifetobeahousewifebutnotamanagerofacompany.東方教育點(diǎn)評(píng)：基本切題。有些地方表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，文字勉強(qiáng)連貫；語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤相當(dāng)多，其中有一些是嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。具體問(wèn)題剖析：（1）論證不夠深入，缺少事例，缺少說(shuō)服力。（2）文字缺連貫、且顯累

10、贅，如第二段可以把各句再改得簡(jiǎn)練一點(diǎn)并且有適當(dāng)?shù)霓D(zhuǎn)承詞。（3）語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤相當(dāng)多，如“Fanexample”，“Somewomenarenotsecrtaryintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagerofacompany.”應(yīng)改為“Somewomenareonlongersecretariesintheofficeinsteadtheybecomemanagersofthecompanies.”（單復(fù)數(shù)）例4（1

11、1分段）Womenareplayinganincreasinglyimptantpartinsocietytoday.Memewomengotowktoearnmoneyinsteadofkeepingthehouselookingafterthechildren.Womenhaveenteredmanyfieldsofsocietyincludingscientificfield.Asweknowmanywomensptsteam

12、shavewonthewld’schampionssuchasChinesewomen’sVolleyballTeam.Withthechangesintheirsocialrolewomen’spositioninthefamilyhasbeenimprovedaswell.Husbsarenotthemastersofwivesinmanyplaces.Husbswivesareequalnow.Theyjointogether

13、toovercomedifficultiessharehappiness.Inspiteofthesechangestheliberationofwomenhasnotbeencompletelyrealized.Alsoinsomeplaces.Womenareconsideredbeing“thing”belongtomen.Theyhavelittlechancetofindjobs.Theydon’tgetequalpayf