高中英語作文復習公開課課件-(共31張ppt)

1、高中英語復習寫作講評課Assessment & practice of Writing,2008年奧運會剛剛落幕，一家英文報刊在其網站上征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議。假設你叫李華，是該報的一名讀者，請給該報編輯部寫一封信，談談你的建議和理由． 內容包括：１．向公眾開放，用于健身２．租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經濟效益３．開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客．４．………Dear editor, I am Li Hu

2、a, a reader of your paper.………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………,評分的四大緯度,內容,語法,思想,框架---組織結構,,要點全，拓展有度，有效,,連接詞，作文結構緊湊；流暢,,準確，復雜語法結構，高級詞匯，多種句型,開放能引起讀者的共鳴,靈魂,,常見錯誤:,,1.單詞拼寫或用錯：

3、,Give you some advise I just provide you my own suggests.They can attact visitors.,,advice,suggestion,,,,,,attract,,問題:,2.時態(tài)語態(tài)問題 We may given it to the PE company. We may give it to the PE company..3. 主謂一致問題

4、 The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken of by the foreigners. The sport stadiums are very great and are highly spoken of by the foreigners.,4. 逐字翻譯問題 The stadiums can open to people for do exercise

5、 use.The stadiums can be opened to people for doing exercises.,問題:,5. 詞性混淆問題It can creative money..It can create/bring in money.Many people can use them to strong our body.Many people can use them to strengthen our

6、body.6. 介詞短語的運用問題I am writing to make some advice for how to make full use of the sports stadium.I am writing to make some advice on how to make full use of the sports stadium.,問題:,句子結構不完整Only make full use of them d

7、oes it make sense .Only by making full use of them does it make sense The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in Beijing were held successfully.The 29th Olympic Games which were hosted in Beijing were held successfully.,1

8、. 審題2. 列提綱/要點3.連詞成句4.連句成篇5. 潤色修正6. 定稿,寫作步驟:,,體裁時態(tài) 結構要求,,字數內容,信息2信息3信息4,開頭正文結尾,1.審題:,體裁人稱時態(tài) 要求結構,,字數內容,一般現在時,Para.1Para.2Para.3,,抓要點, 120個左右,,信息1,信息5,①08年奧運會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.

9、③你想寫一些建議.,,向公眾開放，用于健身,,,總結，意愿……,書信格式,,租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經濟效益,開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,第一,三人稱,①08年奧運會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議,,,2.列提綱/要點,開頭信息1,①08年奧運會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議.,,.,Want to write some advice/Would l

10、ike to give you some adviceContribute some suggestions to you.,Collect some adviceHow to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .,The 2008 Be

11、ijing Olympic/ were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing.,①向公眾開放，用于健身.②租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經濟效益.③開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,,,2.列提綱/要點,.,Use it as/be used for/as; take it as; open it forPlaces of interest/tourist attractionsAttrac

12、t tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors,Give …to/Rent…to/be rented toSport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matchesMake/ create money; bring in money/make more profits,Open/be opene

13、d to the people/public/open them to public.Be used for/as; be made to;Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our bodies,信息2信息3信息4,向公眾開放，用于健身,租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經濟效益,開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,正文,,,,2.列提綱/要點,.,信息5,總結，意愿……,結尾,In my opi

14、nion/ as far as I am concerned../from my point of view.I would appreciate…I would you will think of /take…into consideration….,,,開頭信息1,①08年奧運會剛剛落幕.②征集奧運會后如何綜合利用體育場館的建議.③你想寫一些建議.,,.,3.連詞成句,①The 2008 Beijing Olympic Ga

15、mes were over/finished.The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Beijing.Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.,①The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.Beijing a

16、chieved its dream of hosting the 29th Olympic Games successfully.,②Collect some adviceHow to use/make use of /make the best of the stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .,②You are

17、 collecting some advice on how to make use of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games .I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic

18、 Games successfully.,③Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some adviceContribute some suggestions to you.,③I would like to give you some advice.I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you,,

19、,4.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it forPlaces of interests/tourist attractionsAttract tourists/appeal to visitors/ be attraction for visitors,3.Give …to/Rent…to/be rented toSport company/companies which org

20、anize matches/organizing matchesMake/create money; bring in money/make more profits,信息2信息3信息4,向公眾開放，用于健身,租給體育公司，創(chuàng)造經濟效益,開辟成旅游景點，吸引游客,正文,,3.連詞成句,2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public.Be used for/as

21、; be made to;Do some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodies,2.The stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies,3.The stadiums can be rented to sport company whic

22、h organize matches.It can bring in more money/make more profits,4.They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,,,.,信息5,總結，意愿……,結尾,In my opinion/ as far as I am concerned../from my point of

23、 view.I would appreciate…I would you will think of /take…into consideration….In a word…,3.連詞成句,,From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use of the stadium. I would appreciate it if you would take

24、 my advice into deep consideration,4.連句成篇,Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would like to contrib

25、ute the following suggestions to you.,Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can

26、 bring in more money/make more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,,Para.3: From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it i

27、f you would take my advice into deep consideration,4.連句成篇,Para.1: The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums. I would

28、 like to contribute the following suggestions to you.,,Para.1: I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here

29、 I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.,,,4.連句成篇,Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize m

30、atches. It can bring in much more profits. They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,,Para.2: First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies. Sec

31、ondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors.,,,,First of all First

32、ly,To begin with,,In addition,Besides,Moreover,What’s more,Finally,What’s worse,,使用恰當的連接詞,,first; firstly; second; secondly; last but not least,and; too; as well as; along with; together with,for example; for instan

33、ce; like; such as; as to,but; however; while; though; on the contrary,because; since; thanks to; as a result /consequence (of); thus; therefore,,,in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusion,what’s more; besides; to ma

34、ke matters worse; what’s worse; worse still; furthermore,4.連句成篇,I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Her

35、e I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport compa

36、ny which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make fu

37、ll use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration,,,5.潤色修正,,二. 使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔,三. 巧用倒裝增強句子表現力,四.嘗試多樣化表達方式,5.潤色修正方式,一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力,,①強調句,②With短語復合結構,③定語從句,④名詞性

38、從句(主賓表同從句),⑤各種狀語從句,⑥被動語態(tài),1. Many people want to visit the stadium . 2. The stadium is useful.,Many people are dying to visit the stadium.,The stadium is of great value.,一.使用較高級詞匯使文章增加吸引力,,,,,5.潤色修正,1.The 29th Olymp

39、ic Games were successfully ended. It left many stadiums unused,The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended, leaving many stadiums unused.,,,二. 使用非謂語動詞使句子簡潔高檔,5.潤色修正,,,1.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make

40、 full use of the stadium 2. The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits. they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.,Only when we make full use of the stadium can w

41、e let stadium make sense.,Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits, but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.,,,5.潤色修正,,,三. 巧用倒裝增強句子表現力,,,We sho

42、uld take the Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully.The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully. we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives

43、,It is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully.,With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for

44、our daily lives.,,,5.潤色修正,,,四. 嘗試多樣化表達方式,①強調句,,②With短語復合結構,You can open them for the public. The stadiums can be used to take exercise.,You can open the stadiums which can be used to take exercise for the public.,,,5.潤色修

45、正,,四. 嘗試多樣化表達方式,③定語從句,④各種狀語從句,我們鍛煉的越多，我們就越健康。,The more exercises we take, the healthier we will become.,⑤被動語態(tài),We should pay more attention to the stadiums.,,More attention should be paid to the stadiums.,I heard you are

46、collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First o

47、f all, the stadiums can be opened to the public. The public can strengthen their bodies. Secondly, The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches. It can bring in much more profits. last but not least

48、, They can be used as tourist attraction. It can attract many visitors. From my point of view, we should do what we can to make full use the stadium. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice

49、into deep consideration,,5.潤色修正,高考書面表達各檔次的給分范圍和要求,第五檔（21-25分） 完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務:準確、清楚地表達了短文的內容，要點無遺漏應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯語法結構和詞匯有少許錯誤，但為盡可能使用較復雜表達方式 所致；具備較強的語言應用能力有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊完全達到了預期的寫作目的。,第四檔（16-20分） 完成了試題規(guī)定的

50、任務:比較準確、清楚地表達了短文的內容應用語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求語法結構和詞匯應用基本準確，少許錯誤主要是因為嘗試較復 雜語言結構或詞匯所致應用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊達到了預期的寫作目的。,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully, What we should do now is how to make full

51、use of the stadiums. I heard you are dying for some advice on how to make the best of them. Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you. First of all, the stadiums can be opened to the pub

52、lic, where they can strengthen their bodies conveniently. Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport companies which organize matches, thus bringing in much more profits. last but not least, They can be used as tourist

53、 attraction. Because many of them are so well designed with strong Chinese features that they will surely be attractions for visitors from all over the world. From my point of view, we should do what we can to

54、 make full use of the stadiums. Only when we take actions can we bring a bright future to their value. I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration,,潤色修正,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,學校英語社征稿，請同學們